The mysterious stranger | engl. Kurzgeschichte

Hi!
Wir sollten in Englisch zu morgen eine Kurzgeschichte schreiben über das Thema "The mysterious stranger". Als sei das nicht schon genug, sollten auch noch folgende Wörter drinne vorkommen:
artificial(=künstlich), atmosphere (Atmosphäre), blanket (=Decke), cloth (=Tuch), dawn (dämmern/Dämmerung...), odd (=seltsam), pale (=blass), silent (=leise)

Ich fand meine eigentlich gar nicht so schlecht^^, deshalb wollte ich sie euch mal zeigen. Vllt findet ja noch jemand Fehler!!??
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I open my eyes carefully and notice that there is a dawn light. It's not the sun, no. It's more an artificial light.
I try to move my head, but I can't. I even can't move my legs or my arms. I even can't feel them! But I can feel, that there's something over me, something like a blanket. Suddenly I hear an odd noise and then it's silent again.
There's a man! He looks at me and is saying something I can't understand and I also can't answer him. I get worried and affraid. The man has a mask on his face and in his hand I see a silver thing, which obviously could be a knife.
Oh my god, what happens here? Something's going on with me, but I can't see anything but the pale light above me. The atmosphere seems very threatening (=bedrohlich) but also quietly... Only the mysterious stranger is speaking, maybe to some other man I can't see. Now the man with the mask is holding another thing in his hand. Is it a cloth? But it looks like there's blood on it!
In the next moment a women bends forward me (=beugt sich über mich) und does anything. But what?
I get tired. Very tired...
...I open my eyes again. Everything is white and suddenly I hear my mother speaking.
"Oh, you woke up! Everything's okay with you? The doctor told me you were conscious (=bei Bewusstsein) for a short time during the narcosis(=Narkose)."
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Sorry, es sind nicht ganz 1500 Zeichen!
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Dieser Beitrag wurde 2 mal editiert, zum letzten Mal von Anchen: 22.01.2006 22:33.