Songtext: Revenge

Ich habe versucht meinen Liedtext 'Rache' zu übersetzen. Hier ist mein Werk (rache ist glaub ich auch hier zu finden)

There are things,
Where other people laugh
You are the hero of this day
What do you want? Say it!
It will come a moment
Where I laugh about you

You believe, what you do
About you laugh
Don’t hurt?
It’s like sea
Where risk too go over
But what I say
It’s for you ridiculous
Out your sight
But who ask me?
Not You!

Refrain
A time will come,
Then I take my revenge
That do, what you do to risk
And you have success with that
This is the end of all

You mean with your words,
Out of so many kinds
Do you hurt?
But what I see
Do you don’t know
You little boy
Sometimes its hurts
And when I go past
You only bully me
But you don’t know of my oath

Refrain
A time will come,
Then I take my revenge
That do, what you do to risk
And you have success with that
This is the end of all

About all this I laugh
And make a secret revenge for you
It will be a hell for you
It will be kill you, too
You will suffer
And never bully me as before
You never risk
To say it in my face
I only laugh about you,
And make a secret revenge for you.


Ich freu mich auf jede Kritik, Lob, Verbesserungsvorschlag.
Lg
Ales

will keiner was sagen?

ich muss sagen ich mag das orginal lieber, das hört sich auch viel besser an, wie ich finde
aber ein versuch war es wert
danke ausserdem fürs verbessern